But you know, I may not always be the best judge of such things.
Heh. Just yesterday I had to give up on a book I was reading--an older SF time travel story that, if the cover blurb is to be believed, is a classic--because after just having finished Dust, this other story's prose was terribly plain and lacking in tension. The author might as well have started most of the sentences with 'And then', it bored me so badly.
I can't see any of your prose being plain and lacking tension, being as you have helped ruin me for the actual plain stuff. Not that I'm complaining, mind you.