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Today's quibbly word-choice conundrum:

palm wood scented with perfumed oils

or

palm wood darkened with perfumed oils


The answer, of course, is the second. Because "darkened" provides additional information, where "scented" provides the same information as the word "perfumed," later on.

2500 words so far today on "The Ghost Makers," a fantasy story set in the Eternal Sky world that I'm writing for Jonathan Starhan. I'm trying to write this climactic scene, and I think a little conceit I like might have to come out if I can't justify it. Also, this is supposed to be an action scene, and all these fuckers want to do is banter.

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unhappytriad
Dec. 3rd, 2012 01:08 am (UTC)
"Also, this is supposed to be an action scene, and all these fuckers want to do is banter."

My characters do that too. Of course, I can't blame them; I'd rather talk than fight, too.

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