They picked that excerpt to sell the book? *headdesk* I like feminist SF quite a bit, have been reading it since the 1970's, but no. Just no.
I used to be an English teacher and things like whilte and rever make me reach for a red pen. Effective dialect, imho, should not look like the copy editor had a fatal heart attack whilte while working on page 3 to be replaced by the editor's wife's podiatrist.