it's a great life, if you don't weaken (matociquala) wrote,
it's a great life, if you don't weaken
matociquala

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undimmed by human tears

More on the fine art of revising and editing, and sentence-level control of one's rhetoric and prose.



Before:

Every word like a blow, and yet he saw the logic of it. Logic that galled like a spur struck against his skin.

After:

Every word a blow, and yet the logic galled like a spur against his skin.



It's like bonsai.

You have to get rid of anything that might blur the line.
Tags: revision wingeing, writing craft wank
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