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writing softcore nerdporn _ heres_luck

many people assume the hairy mammoth is extinct, but there could be one out behind your garage.

Gah. If I can just get the suck out of this one single scene, the book will be done.

Maybe I should just take out the sex, and head straight for the torture and the stabbing....

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Good god, don't take out the sex. Add more sex.
That would do very little to resolve the narrative problems with the scene.
*violently strigils romance tropes*

Maybe that will help.
Nonono, when in doubt, combine: what you need is stabby torture sex! Or tortuous stabby sex! Or sexy tortuous stabbing!
No, that's what I've got, and it's not working!!!

I think the problem is too much schmoop.

*scrapes and pokes, as if for tanning*
Maybe I should just take out the sex, and head straight for the torture and the stabbing....

If done right, they can be one in the same...
Wow, that's almost exactly where I'm at!
*passes the hatchet*
You are most encouraging to the rest of us...