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March 2017



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you'd see the voices that control me from inside my head say i shouldn't kill you yet

Yeah, so. The harpy story is definitely broken, because truepenny read it and identified exactly the same brokenness that I suspected.

The good news is, I think I know how to fix it. It may require some major surgery and an organ transplant, but I know what to do.

I hate broken stories. They hurt. Until I can figure out how to fix them--sometimes until I get the work done--they make a physical sensation of pressure in my chest, like being unable to draw a breath. I get very anxious and crabby, and I want to whine and pace like a nervous dog until they stop being broken. And when a broken one makes it into print (as does occasionally happen, due to deadline pressure or my never figuring out how to fix something that's been written to contract) I have to live with the knowledge that it will be out there, broken, forever.


Yeah, best job ever. I'm going to bed.


and I want to whine and pace like a nervous dog until they stop being broken.

This creates an exceptionally vivid picture in my head -- which isn't easy to do as *so* not a visual thinker. But I have, of course, seen dogs do that very thing. I usually feel that way about things that I've promised to do and haven't done yet and the deadline is imminent, or, indeed, passed.

Tail down and ears folded, you betcha. *whines and paces*
I have a novel which, if not broken precisely, is showing signs of cracks. Some of this is confidence: it's dealing with bigger stuff than Living With Ghosts (the one that is due from DAW in March) and I feel uncertain as to my competence. And some of it is... Umm, don't know but it *feels* wrong: the best description I can come up with is that it progresses in hiccups. So this is a shameless plea for any advice, please. And apologies for the shamelessness in asking you, given we are at best slight acquaintances.
Eep. Yeah, Chill is doing that to me as well.

What *I* plan to do is go back and write a lot of transitions and enforce causality--this happened BECAUSE that happened, rather than that happened AND THEN this happened.

Any help there?

(Also, congrats on book sale, if I did not already say..... Yay team you!!!! Daw is a good house, from what I hear.)
I'm not la_marquise_de but I found it very helpful.

I've got a book like that that's been broken on the order of years, and it still bothers me. I try to poke at it to figure out what's wrong, but the pieces just won't come together. I like the "because" method of looking at it quite a bit.
Thank you very much: that is helpful -- I have a bunch of notes which pretty much say things like 'retrofit this' and 'move this back to ch. N'. It's also being told as a braided narrative, which I haven't done before, and I keep finding that when I get back to a braid (there are three) I'm cold to restart in that voice. It might be easier it I told it differently, but this is the mode it needs, so... I'll get there. Or not.
More thanks for the advice.
Speaking of the creative process, have you seen this video?

David Bowie writes a song for Ricky Gervais
I did! Thank you!
Interesting how much of that mirrors my experience writing software. (Including, I suspect, cringing at earlier works.)
Ha. I just now realized that I wasn't reading closely enough, and that I thought you were writing "the happy story," as if you writing a story that was happy was unique enough for you to call it "the happy story"....
Completly not related to the content of this post - but I love both the title of this post and the song it came from.