it's a great life, if you don't weaken (matociquala) wrote,
it's a great life, if you don't weaken
matociquala

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the sound of the piper counts for everything

So since I appear to be insomnia girl tonight (the difference between mania and insomnia is that I'm yawning) I thought I would see if I could get my words, since working makes me sleepy.

And I just spent five minutes doing this:

When word of the fall of Qarash reached Tsarepheth, the Once-Princess Samarkar did not at once hear of it.
When word of the fall of Qarash reached Tsarepheth, the Once-Princess Samarkar did not hear of it.

When at first word of the fall of Qarash reached Tsarepheth, the Once-Princess Samarkar did not immediately hear of it.
When first word of the fall of Qarash reached Tsarepheth, the Once-Princess Samarkar did not hear of it.
When at first word of the fall of Qarash reached Tsarepheth, the Once-Princess Samarkar did not hear of it.
When word of the fall of Qarash at first reached Tsarepheth, the Once-Princess Samarkar did not hear of it.

When word of the fall of Qarash first reached Tsarepheth, the Once-Princess Samarkar did not hear of it.

All this for a sentence I may someday cut anyway.

Writing is hard. Let's do math.
Tags: eternal sky, range of ghosts, writer at work, writing craft wank
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