it's a great life, if you don't weaken (matociquala) wrote,
it's a great life, if you don't weaken
matociquala

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hard fate that i should banished be

I'm editing in public again!

What I wrote:

He wore a blue cloak embroidered with stars, which she guessed was some sort of mark of the Caliph's favor.

What I revised it to:

He wore a blue cloak sewn with stars, perhaps some mark of the Caliph's favor.
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