buy your dreams a dollar down
location: on the couch under a laptop
mood: 
working
workingmusic: Somebody listening to the radio in another part of the house
Temur closed his eyes and smiled against her shoulder
Had it not been for his growing sense of unease, Temur might have closed his eyes and smiled against her shoulder
Had it not been for his growing unease, Temur might have closed his eyes and smiled against her shoulder
If not for the unease growing in his belly, Temur might have closed his eyes and smiled against her shoulder.
If not for the unease tossing in his belly, Temur might have closed his eyes and smiled against her shoulder.
If not for the unease tightening his belly, Temur might have closed his eyes and smiled against her shoulder.
If not for the unease constricting his belly, Temur might have closed his eyes and smiled against her shoulder.
If not for the unease tossing in his belly, Temur might have closed his eyes and smiled against her shoulder.
Not a flashy sentence by any means, but this is pretty much how I write everything. Tweak and twist and pull and settle, fuss and pull out cliches and try out verbs and try to get the scaffolding folded out of sight.
It slows me down from how I used to write, but I think the end result is better.
You know, when I first started reading your posts like this, it seemed such an arcane process Not Meant For Mortal Woman To Ken, but the recent ones have been a lot clearer in how/why they're changing (to me, anyway). I'm not sure if this is a change in my level of understanding or if it's you picking different kinds of sentences, though.
EVERY sentence?
Neither do scenes.