throw another bear in the canoe

It's annoying that as I learn to write better, my old stuff refuses to retroactively repair itself to the new standard.

The good news is, I'm getting a ton of scaffolding out of this stuff. It's amazing how inarticulate some of this is. Seventeen words used where I needed three.

This is a good thing, because Liz also wants a bunch of stuff explained more patently that I more or less inclued very subtly in the first version. It's *in* there, but it's latent rather than patent. So I need space to do that in. (Assuming I can do it subtly enough to not have it suck a lot.)