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Just a brief note to congratulate truepenny on the Publishers Weekly starred review of her "exceptional" first novel, Melusine. Out August 1st from Ace.

In other news, sartorias is a goddamned genius. I want a gross. Since she just essentially explained to me in three short paragraphs how to fix the lack-of-narrative-urgency problem I've been whining about in Whiskey & Water since January, and was just about to kick leaves over in frustration and call a feature, because I loved the rhythm of the voice too much to sacrifice it for tension.

So with a little luck, it'll stay a pavanne. It'll just be a pavanne on sword blades, if I can pull this off.

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Since she just essentially explained to me in three short paragraphs how to fix the lack-of-narrative-urgency problem I've been whining about in Whiskey & Water since January

Feel free to elaborate on the solution, as I'm struggling with lack-of-narrative-urgency stuff in my own novel rewrites!
Well, it's specific to the fairy tale narrative tone of this particular book and how to detail the character's internal conflicts, so I'm not sure it would be of any use to anybody else. *g*

It's just one of those things where the person with the mad skillz goes "Oh, you poke it like this!" and the apprentice goes "Oh. Now I see what you meant."
Yes, I guess there's no universally applicable magic bullet for this problem, alas! :-) (Fortunately, I also have somebody with mad skillz to read my manuscript!)
useless out of context. *g*
We loves sartorias, yes. We even wishes she was on tap all year round, instead of just summers.

---L.
Clearly we need to find a rich patron for sartorias.
She's a goddess. And a very smart cookie.
Publishers Weekly! Publishers Weekly! No apostrophe.

Signed, "Fatally Attracted To Lost Causes"
*g* Inshallah, sahib.
sartorias is a fumbler still trying to learn to write a decent sentence (see that mirage vanishing just ahead?) who sometimes accidentally fumbles in the right direction . . .
sartorias underestimates herself...
A gross of Sartorii? (Gotta be a better plural than Sartoriuses, n'est-ce pas?)

I've tried to find a definition of "pavanne" online, but could not, though several songs seem to be titled that, and a pavane is some kind of Renaissance dance, which would go along with the sword blades reference a la Scottish sword dancing. Could you help me out?