Liz said (after a lengthy list of things she liked about the book, for which I am eternally grateful, especially since one of the things she liked was Kit) she thought it needed more changes than B&I did... and then she went on to list them.
And, as predicted, she mostly thinks the omniscient isn't such a good idea. Pity the book won't be written in anything else. (Hopefully, this is the last time I will ever have that problem. As God is my witness, I will never
Actually, I think I'm looking at less work than last time, but don't tell her I said that. The problem is that, no matter what I do to the first 200 pages of this book, it's boring. And I need it. It does a lot of things I need to have happen. But it's so busy laying the bricks that need to be laid for the last 300 pages of the book to come down like the ton of bricks they are, that it's a bit tensionless.
And I've been over it twice now trying to punch it up, and apparently my efforts have been insufficient.
So, I will be celebrating NaDruWriNi by guzzling Laphraoig and looking for places to insert explosions.
Without actually increasing the word count.
I'm going to need a bigger bottle.
In good news, though, both kit_kindred and the grandmotherly security guard at the shoe store thought my hair looked cute.